FIREWORKS!
Post your best explosive
(literally or figuratively, physically or emotionally) scene from your writing.
Tell about your reaction to writing it, background information, etc.
One of the
most emotionally explosive scenes in my writing was in my first book, Faith,
Hope and Love.
Here’s the
excerpt from FAITH, HOPE and LOVE, available at http://www.amazon.com/Faith-Hope-Love-Homespun-Romance-ebook/dp/B00EKNTNTM:
“The judge's
entrance fast forwarded the drama. Luke
detached himself from the scene, willed himself into the role of impartial
outsider. It was the best way he knew to
help himself.
Both
counsels presented their cases. Both
clients wanted the same thing. Custody
of ten-month-old Gordon Summers.
He was
called to the stand, reminded of the oath he'd taken. Myrna gave him an it's-in-the-bag smile and
Luke realized he hated rapacious women with too white teeth. But then he'd wanted the best lawyer.
"Mr.
Summers would you share with the court, the details of the twentieth of
July?"
Luke cleared
his throat. His eyes swerved to Rachel
Carstairs. She sat on the edge of her
seat. For the first time that morning
she was looking straight at him. Not
through him. The look in her eyes were
twin drills, boring into his brain.
"I was
spending the weekend on the ranch I co-owned with my late brother." The words conjured instant pain. "My brother and sister-in-law had
decided to fly to Palm Springs for a charity gala." Another pause, longer this time. The muscle throbbing in his jaw made it hard
to sound matter-of-fact. "Their
plane crashed ten minutes after takeoff.
It exploded on impact. There were
no survivors."
He looked
her way again. Her stillness tugged at
him. Both arms were wrapped around her
body. As if she was cold. As if she wanted to shut out the scene he had
just painted. In that moment Luke knew
that she had loved Chris. The thought
landed on the top of his already high pile of doubts, escalating his
uneasiness.
They should
have found another way of sorting out their differences.”
While writing this scene, I felt the immense sadness of
Rachel at losing her only living relative in the world; her cousin Chris. I also felt Luke’s deep sense of loss over
his brother and sister in law’s death. She
had flown half way around the world and had nothing except the love she felt
for her late cousin and the urge to do her best for Chris’s son. The little boy she felt was her one shot at
giving and finding love.
Luke has everything…a big ranch, money, power. Rachel has a small savings account.
It was a given Luke would win and Rachel would be out in the
cold again.
The court case is the beginning of their romance. Ten month old Gordie is an amazing matchmaker
and of course everything ends well.
Feeling
Rachel’s pain and sense of inadequacy from the minute she set eyes on Luke helped
me paint the scene with the right brush strokes of emotional tension.
Thanks Robin for including me as we light up the sky.
Let's go over to the next blog and see what exploding there...
